Posting something from the villain's POV this time. As always you can see the rest of the talented Six Sunday gang here.http://sixsunday.blogspot.com/
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Too bad about the boys, he hated killing kids, but they could identify his men. He couldn’t afford to lose his crew this early in the game, which meant none of the hostages could survive.
Including the kids.
He’d do them quick, though. Take care of it personally, make sure they didn’t feel a thing. Hell, he’d even take them someplace special beforehand—maybe to Chucky Cheese, Jilly’s kids loved that damn place.
Nasty bugger, isn't he? Loved this look at the villain.
ReplyDeleteHope he get's his head handed to him on a platter.
ReplyDeletea truly twisted villain!
ReplyDeleteWow, this guy is EVIL!
ReplyDeleteYikes! This villain is horrible! Poor kids. :(
ReplyDeleteHe gives me the shivers.
ReplyDeleteTotally creep, so, just right!
ReplyDelete*gasp* Trish! So much is said here and the emotion it evokes in the reader. Well done!
ReplyDeleteWow, great way to make a villain really evil. Good job!
ReplyDeleteOoh! Well done! I say he should take out the mouse while he's there. That's one annoying cheese breath the world won't miss.
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OMG! That excerpt certainly got my attention. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteChilling, but you know you have a believable villain when he can justify his actions in his own head. He's calculating and diabolic, but thinks he's doing the best thing possible. Disturbing six (in a GOOD way).
ReplyDeleteThat is so incredibly creepy. I feel dirty being inside his head.
ReplyDeleteHa! This is a good villain. I like the way his actions make perfect sense to him, even though they're obviously evil.
ReplyDeleteI hate it when villains have a decent streak in him. I get that he thinks he has to do what he has to do, but still.
ReplyDeleteHe's a bad bad bad man!
OK. I am totally freaked out
ReplyDeleteZOMG! That's so awesome! A bad guy who's actually bad!!
ReplyDeleteSpectacularly villainous. Chucky Cheese! OMG.
ReplyDeleteWell, despite his nagging conscience, you've created a character I can really hate. great six!
ReplyDeleteNow there's a heartless villain. I'm ready to choke him on Chucky Cheese
ReplyDeleteLove it! I like the internal conflict and then the sort of compromise with taking them to Chucky Cheese. Fab job!
ReplyDeleteThat is so cold!
ReplyDeleteLots of excellent suspense in six sentences. That creep has got to die, but how, and how to rescue the kids?
ReplyDeletehow thoughtful of him..Chucky Cheese, first. LOL This guy is evil...great snippet! Really shows how cold hearted he is, but how he doesn't see it that way. LOVE it
ReplyDeleteI don't think I could even write about killing kids. Great six. I'm totally creeped.
ReplyDeleteWell how thoughtful of him! :-O
ReplyDeletePoor kids. You nailed the creepy vibe for sure.
ReplyDeleteDamn that is cold.
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