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Saturday, January 22, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #amwriting #amwritingparty

Hey everyone, I'm joining the Six Sentence Sunday gang for the first time today.

These sentences are from the almost completed WIP- Zane's War. Better known as Zane. In this scene Zane is in the E.R. waiting for word of a fallen brother-in-arms.

Here We Go!

Uncertain what to say, Zane lifted his hand, started to rake it through his hair, but a flash of red stopped him. He froze, focusing. His hand was stained crimson, crusted with Cosky’s blood.

He lifted his right hand—the one still clamped around his cell phone—and stared, the blood a dark blur beneath his burning eyes. His mind flashed back. The breathless grunt as that first bullet hit.. . .Cosky lurching forward. . . the wet thwack, thwack, thwack as round after round struck . . .the twitch of dying muscles. . .the blood. . . so much fucking blood.

You can visit the rest of the brave folks putting their Six Sentences up after 9 AM. Eastern time through here.

36 comments:

  1. Congrats on your first 6. Good descriptions there. :)

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  2. Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday. Great first post!

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  3. excellent first post. the scene is very good. Welcome to "6"

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  4. Welcome! Thats a great post! I want more!

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  5. Nothing sexier than a man who runs his hand through his hair...yum

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  6. Wow. Great 1st post. Powerful imagery. Thwack, thwack, thwack.

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  7. Whoa, that's intense.

    Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday!

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  8. Wow, that is an intense six! Awesome job!

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  9. Very nice. Probably not for Zane, though. ;)

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  10. Gulp. Excellent visual. Intense, bloody riddled with bullets shown well.

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  11. Like how you expressed his shock with such color. Welcome to SSS!

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  12. Love this. Sucks you right into the moment.

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  13. Wonderful descriptions! Welcome to Six Sunday!

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  14. Very emotional and vivid. Thanks for sharing and welcome.

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  15. Wow, that was very vivid and I swear I could see the blood on my own hands. Out, out damn spot! From one newbie to another, welcome to SSS!

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  16. I agree, very powerful. Really makes you feel for the guy. Great six.

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  17. Wow! That's a great six sentences! Paints a vivid picture.

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  18. Wow. So much tension and emotion packed in there. Great stuff. Definitely want to see more!

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  19. Love the description in this! A great excerpt :)

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  20. Nicely done and welcome to sss

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  21. welcome to SSS what a great six...sweet impact with such few words. Nice work on the details, the bloody details!!

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  22. Great post. Lots packed into those sentences!

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  23. Dynamite! I heard the thwack of bullets. Love sound effects. Very powerful.

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  24. Wow,

    Thanks to everyone for reading. What fantastic support you guys have for Six Sentence Sunday!
    Lot of fun, plan to be back next Sunday!

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  25. Love the intensity! Great first post and welcome to SSS! Will be looking for more...

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  26. Powerful. Draws you right into the action.

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  27. Very sensual! More than just words on a page, there's impact (in more ways than one)! Keep going!! Are you going to post more of this?

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  28. Hi McKenna,

    Thanks for stopping by and checking out my six. I am going to post again next Sunday, although I haven't decided yet exactly what I'll be putting up. Only thing I'm certain of, is that it will be from Zane.

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  29. Hey Trish. Nice six. Oh, and I love the background colours of your site

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  30. Great first post. So much emotion in so few words.

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  31. Welcome to the party girl, so glad you could join us! Loved the 6 and I look forward to hearing more from Zane. BTW congrats on finishing the manuscript! :)

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  32. Thanks Layna, the party's been a ton of fun so far, looking forward to next week!

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