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Sunday, July 3, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday #amwriting #sixsunday

Sunday has once again rolled around and it's time for another SSS.
These lines follow one of the big battles in Forged in Fire. One of the secondary heroes is injured, he’s also with a woman he’s reluctantly attracted to, and trying his damnedest not to show his agony or his attraction. 

As always, you can find the rest of the SSS participants here

            “Let me take a look at your shoulder, how bad is it?”
            It hurt like a motherfucker. “It’s fine. Let’s get to the damn car.”
            Ignoring him, she dropped to her knees and grasped the hem of his t-shirt.
            “I’m fine,” he grated out, punctuating each word with a hiss as she maneuvered his right arm out of its hole and then over his head.
            When she eased the shirt down his left shoulder and arm, the agony rolled through him in a dense, black wave. Nausea twisted his belly, and climbed his throat, Christ, he was about to puke.
            How fucking humiliating.

29 comments:

  1. My stomach clenched there a second, I remember that kind of pain. I hope he pulls through with dignity in tact.

    ~Xakara
    Dawn's Early Light 6SS

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  2. Awww...poor guy! Great show of his turbulent emotions and inner turmoil here!

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  3. Ack, I've felt like kind of pain before. Great job!

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  4. Loved this snippet. Poor guy, though, being in so much pain.

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  5. Great six! Guys can only be macho for so long, but most women can see right through the facade.

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  6. Terrific six lines! I felt his pain.

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  7. Wow what a six! I feel the pain. Thank you.

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  8. Excellent description! Looking forward to reading more.

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  9. Love this six, I felt is agony...but darn him for being so insistent. He's not fine. Tsk! hehe

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  10. Wonderful six sentences that showed her concern and his masculine pride.

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  11. Ooh she's a bit of a sadist - she should have cut his t-shirt off!! Poor boy - loved it, I really felt his pain.

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  12. I could really feel his pain--great job on description!

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  13. Oy! Poor guy. Excellent job in capturing his pain. :)

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  14. I could really feel him. That is awesome.

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  15. I love this!! He's trying to be so alpha and can't admit he's hurt!! *sigh* Scrumptious snip!!

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  16. I love his struggle. Your inner-dialogue is sharp and shows his pain perfectly.

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  17. Come on, tough guy, let her help! You caught his emotions perfectly. Great six.

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  18. Poor guy, I felt for him. Great six!

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  19. That's a wound that demands treatment, while he machismo needs to take a back seat! Besides that's a golden opportunity to get next to her (well, except for the vomiting part...)

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  20. Trying to be a tough guy, LOL. You wrote this six really well! :)

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  21. I love that his first thought (after realizing he's going to puke) is how humiliating... says so much about him :)

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  22. What vivid descriptions! And so much is shown about the character in so few words!

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  23. I loved this 6 :) I could really feel for the guy and liked how she wouldn't take no for an answer.

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